|Reviews for Feelings That Most Don't See|
| SpeedingCars8 7/12/07 . chapter 1
this was good. i liked the lines "i cannot seem to move when i thin about you"and "i just want to let you out of heaven, i just want to let you into hell." nice structure in your poetry.
| lordelfy 3/9/07 . chapter 1
This is really good. I like the repetition! The part that talks about lighting their pain on fire i thought "pain" said "pants" so i was confused! Nice poem i like it!
| Tipped 12/16/06 . chapter 1
I like this. It has this raw edge to it that makes it stand out. "I just want to let you out of heaven/ I just want to let you into hell/ I just want to light you pain on fire" the chorus, I'm assuming? Very powerful stuff. I would love to hear the tune.
| Dawnella 11/12/06 . chapter 1
Hmm...okay...but the grammar is a little off...
Ex: "I just want to let put into hell"
| Alyosha Karamazov 7/4/06 . chapter 1
I like this a lot.. I really like the "let you out of heaven" part.
| NeonNights 7/3/06 . chapter 1
Harsh. Images are a bit hard to grasp, though. 'Pain on fire?' Anyways the originals are called Photographs and Composition, they're older so scroll down.
| Catcher in the Rye 6/19/06 . chapter 1
Niceness, It was really deep...sorta...in away...IT JUST WAS! Keep it up, man.
| Sophia Mars 5/16/06 . chapter 1
I ike your piece. It's too bad we all have that one thing that makes us feel this way, even if we tried to burry it many years ago...
| dreaming-while-awake 5/14/06 . chapter 1
"I just want to let you out of heaven
I just want to let you into hell"-these two lines reminded me of Taking Back Sunday which is a good thing because they are one of my favorite bands. Nice job for your first song.
| Black and White Dreams 5/14/06 . chapter 1
I really like this... don't ask me why I dunno. I just like it a lot. Keep writing!
Black and White Dreams