I find this poem beautiful. It reminds me of Tim Burton's clay animation. The imagery and atmosphere is haunting, almost death-like. I love it.

Your words painted a vivid scene. Great job-I loved the last line. It seemed quieter, like just waking from a dream, and I could feel the yearning in it. Oh, and the poem had a very nice shape. (Literally.)

I love this poem-great word choice, and I especially love the ending! Great work, hope to see more!