aw, as much as i love tyhis story i am willing to wait, i hope you find your book, haha, apartments eat things, haha

i love this story and im so upset that your going to wait 7 days to put it up. i hope you put it up sooner!

i really really love your story. it's amazing. it has orginality becuz the characters are described as omes from fairy tales and they don't really have names. i can't wait for the next chapter

Oh my God! That was brilliant! I loved it! MORE PLEASE!

Amazing, I realized that this was updated so long ago, but I do wish you would continue this!



-Always
Pansy

Moving, dark and very tragic. Love it anyways.

I'm a horrible person >.

Oh my goodness, that was so sad! Is it horrible that I loved it?

Great chapter! I love your writing, though if I may critique a bit? The monster POV is only slightly confusing; at times, you don't know if he's talking about his wife or his step-son. And I have to point out this typo: "There were family curses in her clam as well". XD I think it should be 'clan', right?

Otherwise, I love the chatper and can't wait for the second one!!

I defintely see potential in this- please update it randomly sometime this year! XD I love it when the evil ones start to have a conscience or begin to love rather than lust.

I only see a few spelling miserrors (simple typos, really) but otherwise you transition between the scenes very well! I also love how no one has a name still. XD Very creative to be able to pull off a story without names.

I wonder if the monster is his dad, or is a ghost or something that comes at him? Regardless, you've hit one of my loves; abuse. XD So I love this muchly!

I think you could weave the fairytales into it more, because that's a really neat idea. He seemed to be about eight, so I was really taken aback when it said 14 -- he doesn't act the way a 14 year old guy, even an abused one, would act. Also, watch your verbs -- you switch back and forth between present and past tense. Just pick one and stick with it.

Very powerful idea, and the way you refer to the man as a monster and a beast really makes him seem horrible and scary. Good job on the descriptions. :)