did you get this from being on the school paper, or is it just something you thought of randomly?

i like it!! i especially love the part about the clock mocking you (sounds like me during tedious homework evenings)

and the minor detail that i know you makes this funnier

I feel the tension of the last-minute. Good poem. :D

~Leeona Trance

I really enjoyed this...even though the title is "the deadline," I still read the piece with anticipation, and was surprised at the ending. So either I'm just tired, or dumb, or you have a real knack for suspense. I prefer to think the last! =)

Very nice word choices: "toying with thin tendrils and trains of thought that tore through the broken tracks. (the endings of your frayed nerves)" so many "t" sounds made that line very interesting.

And the next paragraph about the numbers mocking leer at the hands of the clock, very clever!

I very, very much like this! I shall go check out more of your work now...