I love your story!

Well, this chapter confuses me a bit...but I suppose it will be explained in the following one

Sque! Alain's just to cute for words and Varen's sex-on-legs.

Can't wait to see more.

A very interesting start. I am definitely curious about the characters and the details of their past. Hope you update soon.

Amazing story, but then again all of your stories are great! I cant wait for more so please update soon.

Ah very promising. I hope you continue soon..

Not a bad beginning. A bit rushed, but not bad. I can tell that you really wanted to get Alain and Varen together, the way you jumped into the story. Have you ever hard of a book called "Juniper" by Monica Furlong? It has a similar beginning, but rather than having the student immediately meet with the teacher, it shows how the princess grew up in a life of material possession and was forced into a completely different one. The point I was trying to make was that the reader doesn't know anything about your protagonist, and they have no way to know about the dealings at court aside from the sparce bit of information you gave. Try to focus a bit more on what Alain's life was like before the first chapter started. It gives the reader an idea of who the character is.

Shadowhound

This is a great story thanks for sending it to me