i heard from *someone* (who was very persistent and annoying...haha jk jk) that you LOVED reviews and wanted more, so i decided to indulge your ego a bit and write you one that told you just how much of an amazing writer you are, and how awesome your story is, and how much you NEED TO UPDATE (although i already know what happens hehe - but its for the benefit of all those less fortunate who must wait for you on fictionpress).

yea but i really dont feel like going into all of that, so i guess your ego's going to have to wait until you update again, and i write another reveiw (maybe maybe). hey, its awesome incentive, right?

have fun kicking that writer within into cooperating with you more (hahaha...ha). but take your time, take your timee.

ah i think i might've read this chapter a while ago but then never reviewed. well you might've forced out a promise from me to review every single chapter so here i am.

just one question- did you edit this after you put this up cause there's stuff in this chapter that i realy don't remember reading...like that stuffa bout the necklace...or maybe the first time i read this, i never read up to that part...

but anyways- AHAHAHA THE NECKLACE THAT'S LIKE TOTALLY OBVIOUS BLATANT FORESHADOWING! but maybe that's just because you told me about the plot...

i was kinda confused about some parts of the beginning though...like what sienna's job exactly is...what she exactly does...how she actually does it. the beginning scene of this chapter is weird. i think i would be even more confused if i had no clue about your story at all. i'm disappointed that you just skipped over all of her school years without even summarizing it a bit but i suppose you don't want to turn this into like harry potter or something.

the flashback part was awesome- it gave the brother a chance to endear himself to the reader and then to make his death even more tragic because now the reader knows about what an awesome character he would've been in the story...if you hadn't decided to kill him off in the third chapter.

look. an extra extra long review. it's a bit choppy and illogical and it kinda jumps from topic to topic but it's the longest one i've ever left for someone on fictionpress. now hurry up, stop being stingy, and upload some of those chapters that are on your computer's hard drive!

KK. Amazing story. I am so proud of you! (Actually you realli don't need my review, cuz you already have tons of fans cheering for you...trust me...and you prolly know this is me.) Anywayz, its good, just a bit choppy at places...also, you should upload that story you did for flum, the "green eyes" one, that was good...ppl will like that one...I love your writing style, its ravishing...Don't put yourself down, cuz its good, trust me...Upload faster and don't be scared to show this to certain ppl...*cough* *cough*...Oh yeah...all the stories you say are good, half of them aren't even finished...it sort of sux, but I guess it works. (Hope you like this review)...UPLOAD FASTER, cuz this is a story that's DIFFERENT.

this story sounds really cool. i really like how it's different from a lot of stories out there. can't wait for the next update. :)

*le gasp

YOU UPDATED! *cheers wildly, stampedes around, jingle songs, etc.*

AND I TOTALLY KNEW IT WAS "HERE COMES THE SUN" FROM THE BEATLES WRITTEN BY GEORGE HARRISON BEFORE YOU TOLD ME IN THE A/N! *hardcore beatles fan*

nice chapter- i liked the descriptions. the dialogue was a little choppy and unnatural but it still a ok. it's amazing how much the main character resembles you. hah. LOTR, horses, books, etc. etc.

'kay yeah, hurry up and update now so we can get to the suspenseful and exciting parts!

There are two people below me who used the same word "intriguing" to describe your first chapter and i believe they both spelled it wrong. i think you started out with a really strong beginning, with that first paragraph. with your first sentence, you set a deeply philosophical tone that really impressed me. but after the seventh paragraph of pure philosophy, it started to get a little bit tedious cause i can only stand philosophy at small doses at a time. i've written long essays like this where i just spit out vomit writing which sounds really cool- but is basically the same idea being repeated in millions of ways. you might want to cut down on some of the repetition you have in your paragraph. not only so, i thought the ending of your paragraph was rather unsatisfying and weak. it didn't really seem to do much justice to the promise your first paragraph brought. but other than those two problems (i told you i critique hard- no one critiques hard enough on this site), it was really good. hurry up with the next chapter.

intriuging. do continue.

In my opinion, it is better than others because it uses such strong and descriptive words. It uses explanations to describe life and its unknown or unlearned

o... I'm intreagued, a very good first chapter, sets up the character a bit...very good, love the writing style, the reflection, pretty much everything. Update soon!