hm for some odd reason this has me deeply intrigued. Just a suggestion- when you have dialogue, remember to start a new paragraph like this...

"Hello Monk of the Elements," said Genesis Rose, "How are you?"

"I am doing fine, Genesis Rose," Monk of the Elements said happily. "Do you like my story?"

Genesis Rose smiled. "Yes I do. Please write more soon!"

get it? Will check back for updates soon...

-GR