This is very well written! The plot is strong, as are the characters. Well done.

Cheers

Bella

you know, i don't think i've actually read through this. i like it a lot so far! it flows well, and it seems like a real diary entry. hehe, i'm off to read more...

oh yeah, i'm writing a book. so things won't get updated for awhile. will finish by the end of the summer. hope things go well for you! i suppose i'll just PM you if i wanna give you a message.

see ya

I have to say that when I first found this story I was skeptical (it being in diary format), but I was more than pleasantly surprised! I may end up staying up all night just to finish reading the rest of the chapters. Very nicely written indeed.

some lovely descriptions in here. Very well written as always, and you move the plot along nicely too. Great job. i am pretty much used to female uri by now :)

*feels stupid*

I read the summary for this chapter, got up to "its up to Uri to figure out what... Poor girl..." and thought, holy crap its a girl. my second thought was 'dear ghod i hope i didn't accidently mention that in my reviews...'

evidently I did, and now I feel a bit stupid :)

Another great chapter. The discovery that Uri is a girl was slightly jarring (which is inevitable really) but the story is still great, and still works fine for me =D

ooh, I do hope you are going to continue with this, it's got all tense and exciting and scary.

Poor master, poor kid. It must be hard for both of them actually, sometimes i even think it's harder for the master, after all, he's the one who'se starting to realise how wrong it is...

wow. really powerful ending. and some beautiful, beautiful descriptions of the festival. this is only a short review as I am going to hurry on to the next chapter...need to see if he's ok!

I've found something else I like about this, the way you very delicately and subtlly slip in all your mythology and descriptions without having big long paragraphs going 'he looks like this...' or 'the moon festival is this...'

great writing, I do like your style and your characters. This is such a new and origonal thingy, love it to bits :)

I am enjoying this a lot more than i thought I would.

you know what I like best? The whole philosophy of the pet. that freedom is unsafe and terrifying and the things that traditionally have negative connotations for us (chains, collar) are to him signs of safety.

nice work :) Scary and wierd in palces (being put down. :o ) but still very good.

This is wonderful...truly wonderful...
I absolutely hate reading diaries because usually--to be frank--they suck. But this was AMAZING! Gawd, I loved it! It was like...gotta keep reading, gotta see what happens lol. The characters are addictive and so round, I might as well be in the story myself. Great use of description, that can be hard in telling a story in first person wihtout making them ramble. I can tell from this story alone that you are an excellent writer. Please please PLEASE continue writing it.
~**MissDiva09**~

Glad to hear Uri has survived. The illness was well portrayed, confusion setting in, etc. The unrest among the Masters seems ominous. Where did that annoying little boy come from? That may need to be investigated.

As to the comments in the author's note:

Thank you for clearing up my confusion about the races. Certain things make more sense now. With the typos, it wasn't chapter 5 in particular. It was just a couple here and there. If you go on Google and look for a dictionary/spell checker, most future errors would be avoided. Not much else for now... I will keep checking back as I have time.

phantom_jedi

Promising... very promising. Are the Pets the same species as the Masters? It would be interesting to know.

There are a number of typos and incorrectly spelled words that detracted somewhat from your writing. Running it through a spellchecker would fix most, if not all, of those.

Continue writing!

phantom_jedi

well, written! diaries are a pain to write as well, the whole chronological idea scares some writers. i'll be waiting for more entries (>'.')>

o nice, i've always found diary form to be annoying but you actually pullt his off quite nicely. I also like how you alway use "Master" it gives the story its own language in a way