ganda ng story hahaha, nakakakilig!... galing ni nikka wahaha =P

You're definitely on the roll! :) Lena's sadistic tendencies (read: satisfaction and/or happiness at other people's misery) quite reminds me of someone I know... someone I always when I look at the mirror! hehe.

Hmm.. interesting combination, eh? One has got a temper and the other's a laid back lad? Looking forward to your updates! So far, story devt's been good. :)

I really enjoy your writing :) I look forward to seeing how this one progresses and i shall definitely be checking up on it! And raven sounds SO hot!!

lmao... I love Lena already! James is okay... not as cool as Lena though!

Nice job... hope you go on...

(Oh, and in the last chapter, I noticed you wrote "t6o," try to watch out for things like that. It's an easy mistake to make... God knows how many times I've done it! ^^)

it was good but i am sad because only one chapter long

Wow! I love the idea, it's absolutly amazing, I can't wait to read more. ^^ The only thing I really see is a few spelling errors and tense mistakse. for example:

“Raven, I’m going to let you off the hook for now since this is your first time to be late,”

'first time to be late' might I sugguest first time 'being' late?

hope you post soon :D

I like James and Raven already! Ok, so i'm a bit biased because their names are somehwhat my favorite. :P Good interaction between the siblings. Their mom's quite a character too. :) Will James' love interest be in the next chapter already?

Nice chap 1, by the way. :)