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| eng-an 2007-03-12 ch 2, anon. | abuseganda ng story hahaha, nakakakilig!... galing ni nikka wahaha =P |
| Sylvia Marri 2006-05-23 ch 2,  | abuseYou're definitely on the roll! :) Lena's sadistic tendencies (read: satisfaction and/or happiness at other people's misery) quite reminds me of someone I know... someone I always when I look at the mirror! hehe. Hmm.. interesting combination, eh? One has got a temper and the other's a laid back lad? Looking forward to your updates! So far, story devt's been good. :) |
| Green Eyes 2006-05-22 ch 2, anon. | abuseI really enjoy your writing :) I look forward to seeing how this one progresses and i shall definitely be checking up on it! And raven sounds SO hot!! |
| JustAnotherHopelessRomantic 2006-05-20 ch 2, | abuselmao... I love Lena already! James is okay... not as cool as Lena though! Nice job... hope you go on... (Oh, and in the last chapter, I noticed you wrote "t6o," try to watch out for things like that. It's an easy mistake to make... God knows how many times I've done it! ^^) |
| Queen Sebastian 2006-05-17 ch 1, | abuseit was good but i am sad because only one chapter long |
| Insane Creator 2006-05-17 ch 1, | abuseWow! I love the idea, it's absolutly amazing, I can't wait to read more. ^^ The only thing I really see is a few spelling errors and tense mistakse. for example: “Raven, I’m going to let you off the hook for now since this is your first time to be late,” 'first time to be late' might I sugguest first time 'being' late? hope you post soon :D |
| Sylvia Marri 2006-05-17 ch 1, | abuseI like James and Raven already! Ok, so i'm a bit biased because their names are somehwhat my favorite. :P Good interaction between the siblings. Their mom's quite a character too. :) Will James' love interest be in the next chapter already? Nice chap 1, by the way. :) |