|Reviews for A Scrapbook of Autumn|
| Averybarbarian 9/5/08 . chapter 1
Good point I do have to say "Why remember a moment/When you can have the entire month?" Well done and the poem was written beautifuly!
| x.IvoryDust.x 3/27/08 . chapter 1
Wow. Truly wonderful. Have you ever considered getting published?
| me. moi. ich 3/27/08 . chapter 1
wow, i have to say that you're so amazing- you inspire me, you really do. the way that you phrase things is so original... i don't even know what to say!
| cosaco 10/15/07 . chapter 39
didn't see this one either. i really like. but i'm not reviewing as much as i did for Hiding in Astronauts! 'cause i'm lazy and 'cause i like this one more and have less to say about it. (i'm too tired to think about what it's saying, though, really.) anyways, it's nice. the end. CoSaCo
| cosaco 10/15/07 . chapter 40
so, i hadn't read this previously (like, when it was posted). i really like the second half, and every few lines in a row would stand out, like the entire "sometimes as a crewman... sometimes as an astronaut, drifting outside" and especially just "electric blips and barrel rolls" 'cause it sounds nice. and then definitely "falling is the duty of an astronaut... so you are probably falling". also, i again just like the sound of "begging the world for band-aid hands". i thought "who never has to worry about falling down and scraping one knee/like you did when you were six/and the swing set refused to carry you to the moon/but instead catapulted you into suborbital flight" was luverly. (though my mind keeps wanting it to read "and the swing set refusing" not "refused" and "catapulting" not "catapulted". just to point that out, if it makes any difference. i think what you have works; i just hear/read it slightly differently.)
anyways, the beginning realy confuses me. maybe 'cause i'm not used to starting with a lowercase and? it doesn't seem right.
sometimes, it seems a little redundant - the kid to astronaut to kid to astronaut to kid to astronaut, because each time it returns back to the "now you are inside an astronaut" it seems to repeat the idea of being snug, and safe, and not having to worry about falling/hurting/gravity. it's good, but i think a little rearrangement might help make it flow better and sound like it doesn't always return to the same exact point. or something. i really don't know what i'm talking about. CoSaCo
(and now i'm going to actually go review RoW like i said, before i got distracted by this)
| TheHangerOfAbhorrantDislike 8/29/07 . chapter 1
Aw...now /that's/ cute. I actually really like the last two lines, don't know why, they just stuck out.
I did read through the poem twice, the idea, though cliche, is a good one. I like the way you presented it, using the calender as your basis. Unique, in this context, anyway. Well, at least that I know of.
Keep writing, it'd be crime not to.
| Sword on Fire 8/14/07 . chapter 40
I love waking up to your poetry, Batman. Seriously, you should try getting published!
This one is really nice. I like the comparisons you make to being grown-up and in space to being six and just pretending.
| Gathering Crows 8/9/07 . chapter 38
Hehehehe. I like this one. Odd subject choice though, any particular inspiration? *grin* Well, I especially like how you show the garbled language and the "urgency"
| Sword on Fire 8/8/07 . chapter 38
Nice and creepy. I like how it's rushed and kind of broken, like a record stuttering.
Also, taking a picture is/was considered taking a piece of their soul ...
| Crossing the Rubicon 8/7/07 . chapter 38
This poem is so original. I love it. I especially love the Rubik's cube part and the part about the gaps in the man's stare.
| Niels Stegeman 7/8/07 . chapter 1
A wonderful and beautiful poem. It's made me interested in the rest of this collection. A very good use of diction and the imagery is quite visual and there's some wonderful stuff in there, for example the last stanza, which I found a great ending to this good poem. Well done and if I find the time, I will certainly read more of this "scrapbook".
| no.peace.los.angeles 7/1/07 . chapter 37
Really really beautiful piece. I love that you take something as simple and mundane as coffee and add all these wonderful dimensions to it. I think the first and last stanzas are my favorites, with the lines "smoothing the edges of shadows/into satin overlaps," "that describe the world/with the geometry of the sleepless," and "the cupping curve of train seats" being my favorites within those stanzas. Really wonderful work here. Keep writing! :)
| kikew1 6/30/07 . chapter 1
I absolutely love this... time is oblivious and there shouldn't be any rush. I loved the story and the flow to it. I definately have to read more of your work.
| Gathering Crows 6/30/07 . chapter 37
You know, I don't think I have ever read a poem for Hotel Coffee. I like this, it seems...soft, like the quiet nights and early mornings in which you drink the bitter nectar of life. *Grin* Coffe
| Gathering Crows 6/29/07 . chapter 36
Again, beautiful. I love how you are the tree, and I love your first line, "Maple me red-leaved". It has a nice rhythm to it. I also love your ending. "Build me a world...". LOVE.