This is a beautiful poem! I really, really enjoyed reading this.

Also, I thought I'd stop by and thank you for your review you left on my site at MetalPoisoning (Painless Love it Doesn't Exit) ... thank you so much for your reviews!

Very emotional. I love how your words fit perfectly into the image you're trying to convey.

Nice descriptions. I especially like the last line. The intro's a bit slow though, up until that bit about the lips and such. Perhaps it's just me. Still. This is good. I like it a lot. Fine job.