if only they were...the last line definitely made me chuckle...when i read the first line it was to the rhythm of "black sheep black sheep"

itissocute. why can't life be as sweet?

* Noelle

lol calorie free. if only real sugar was calorie free. keep on going!

lovely.

lol.. I love that last line.. so perfect and the format in the first line is great too.. awesome piece

haha the last line is funny ] cute poem!

amazing...just amazing imagery and choice of words and ... just wicked

i love the last line. it symbolised so much for me...it has so much strong emotion and imagery and it is just beautiful.

ah gorgeous, im in love with the last line :)

-naomi

This poem is so short but it still manages to get across the feeling. I love the "my my my" and the last line. Nicely done )

haha you GOT it. the words that so many people meant to say but couldn't find. the only odd part about it was the word "estranged." somehow, it doesn't seem to fit.

Heh, I read the first line the same way astral boy did. I love it.

That is all.

Wow, loved this poem, it's so... I can't explain it. Wonderful poem!

made me laugh-a little-because it strikes me as alittletoperfect.

but then, that's how poetry should be.

i love this! i love the feel of it, the taste of it, the 'why aren't you calorie free?'. . . it's just life. meloves.