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| HurtMe 2008-11-29 ch 35,   | I really like this story. It's a very original concept. I like the fact that Duke and Alan ended up together, and had kids, but I wonder what happened to Cain. He played a big part in the story and you didn't really tell what happened to him. Good luck on getting this published. |
| kitty003 2008-11-21 ch 20, | aw, this chappy was really cute...even if it was a bit lengthy with what he was saying. |
| kitty003 2008-11-21 ch 19, | my favorite line: and it slowly lulled me to , not proof read. but yeah, this was really in need of proofreading. |
| kitty003 2008-11-21 ch 18, | the chappys are starting to get really simple. but i guess every story has its more...drawn out points. X3 |
| kitty003 2008-11-17 ch 17, | okay, i know that they just had a tender moment and theyre starting to understand each other better but...A BIT FAST! |
| kitty003 2008-11-17 ch 16, | wow, i just noticed how similar the situation is with one of my old friends. now i feel bad for him |
| kitty003 2008-11-17 ch 15, | oh, ive done that one before. yeah, not a happy ending there. |
| kitty003 2008-11-17 ch 14, | hehe. the author is getting a little fiesty. X3 but i kind of like this chappy too. |
| kitty003 2008-11-06 ch 13, | when alan came home, i would have thought that his mother would have more of an initial reaction than that. i guess not. *sigh* |
| kitty003 2008-11-06 ch 12, | well, even if he gives his testimony, im sure that Jim will somehow or other get the better of the situation and get only a light sentence. idk, but im still reading anyway. X3 |
| kitty003 2008-11-05 ch 11, | Don't worry, we'll tell the police about the pride if you don't want to this makes no sense. anyways, i ish very happy that things are "starting" to get back to normal... well, as normal as normal is for these guys. |
| kitty003 2008-11-05 ch 10, | do you own burger king? what? you own dairy queen now to? hahaha. X3 anyway, now would be an awkwardly good time for Duke to just randomly "pop" in to check on his older brother or something. hehe. |
| kitty003 2008-11-05 ch 9, | although duke really shouldnt, i think that he should come to the rescue...or at least something. idk. i can dream cant i? hehe. |
| kitty003 2008-11-05 ch 8, | not to many mistakes in this chapter. well, at least none that really stood out to me. X3 |
| kitty003 2008-11-05 ch 7, | i hope that you realized that you said something like: "its a good thing that duke has bad aim," says duke! other than that, wasnt it shadow who gave him the drink in the first place? |