Awsome poem, really deep.

It took two reads before I even realized what was happening. I like it though, especially the snippet feel it has.

very intersting - thre is a lot there that isnt said - also liek the way u set it out - nice religious reference (ps thanx 4 reviewing my poem)

Wow. This is gorgeous! I can feel the electricity!

There is one thing I've got to mention, though: the line "Even when I begged for your salvation" doesn't seem to flow quite as well as it wants to. [ Kind of like you shoved it in there just to be a transition to "So in true faith,..." And I don't know what to tell you to help. [ *sorry*

ah lalala I'm so addicted to your poetry. First thing I've read this morning and I'm already awake for the day.