I'm speechless.

That was AMAZING.

wow...the ending just summed it all so sadly but so greatly...

perhaps you mean "staring through the window pane"? cause i can't seem to get the logic of "staring outside the window pane" and "letting someone in"...

truly yours...

wow... this is going on my favorites

I usually get really annoyed with rhyming unless its a song, but i really like this and the imagery definatley is wonderful.

I love the rhymes. Very cool. It reminds me of beat poetry.

ok you're right, sometimes looking at strangers and trying to figure them out is way too interesting : )

mezzie

i wish i had my own summer to wait for... makes me think of the song "perfect sonnet".

oh, this is so beautiful, and you created such a lonely atmosphere. love the way this is written, and it flows really well. nice work!

Beautiful poem, especially like all her questions about him. You make it so poetic from 'fireworks than fireflies' to 'smells like quiet rain'.

This had such a wonderfulyl calm atmosphere, really enjoyed it. Great work well done x

this is nice. it reminds me of a guy i used to know...

to me, this is nothing more than a sad memory. but you made it bittersweet.

very nice. I really can imagine this guy...I loved the wonderings and all the thoughts of this girl. I can relate! very nice. Keep it up.

I did read this and it is really very intriguing, I love how you tell stories just through a short poem and how the ending always makes a big impact through just creating a simple image which manages to tell everything. By the way I just love the description of 'quiet rain or classic aftershave', it's all so familiar to me. Emily

this seems so... pure & elegant. very well done.

So simple but stark; the impact is powerful. The yearning is really delicately portrayed...beautiful voice that carries through. Lovely work.

"or if he would rather see fireworks-than fireflies.", is just an extraordinary comparison. I like the use of the color green, to tie this all together. Another marvelous write. Great work.