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Reviews For: That One Face

123454321
2008-03-08
ch 1,
The second line... Hmm, I don't really like it; it doesn't seem to have correct sentence structure.
Also the line 'Never withering, never ceasing, never loving', 'loving' doesn't seem to be the word to end it.
Other than those two things, I really enjoyed this piece. It is blunt (but I am coming to understand that as your style), yet flows well.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
myownlife
2006-05-27
ch 1,
so very well written. I think a lot of us have that one person whos face we seam to see over and over."Why would I relapse to old habits and vices?" that is the one question I think we all would ask ourselfs. Keep up the good writting ^^
WannaBWriter
2006-05-24
ch 1,
its short but insanely powerful! the whole thought of the "premature grave" was brilliant! the whole poem just sounded as if all hope for a second chance was just dead. i loved it!*thank you for the review! it is greatly appreciated!
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