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| 123454321 2008-03-08 ch 1, | The second line... Hmm, I don't really like it; it doesn't seem to have correct sentence structure. Also the line 'Never withering, never ceasing, never loving', 'loving' doesn't seem to be the word to end it. Other than those two things, I really enjoyed this piece. It is blunt (but I am coming to understand that as your style), yet flows well. -J.A. Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile). |
| myownlife 2006-05-27 ch 1, | so very well written. I think a lot of us have that one person whos face we seam to see over and over."Why would I relapse to old habits and vices?" that is the one question I think we all would ask ourselfs. Keep up the good writting ^^ |
| WannaBWriter 2006-05-24 ch 1, | its short but insanely powerful! the whole thought of the "premature grave" was brilliant! the whole poem just sounded as if all hope for a second chance was just dead. i loved it!*thank you for the review! it is greatly appreciated! |