Hm, amazing. This seems to be a personal one. Nice expression of silent emotions. The poem seems peaceful and kinda thought-provoking. I like it. Try checking out my updated poems when you are free.

This is sort of like a Ruth Prawer Jhabvala who can actually write beautifully. Full of the heated imagery you sometimes display, emotional and with an absolutely perfect ending. Raw and marvellous

very well written. I especially enjoyed the last half of your poem"In our mid-May monsoon, and I tightened my hold"I liked this line a lot.