I loved it =)

Love it!

this story is so great! there are just so many errors! (i understand you are working with a lot, sorry!) i dont know if anyone else has offered, but if you would lik ei could edit it for you! id be more than happy to! if you would like to accept or decline my offer please email me! id love to assit you with this because i see it as only getting better!please email me with a response - daisydoodles68@aol.com

please keep it up with this story!

don't delete the story

oh come on, you had it going there. lol

Not bad at all. Captures being a rebellious teen pretty well in today's world, though I wouldn't really know myself. The grammar at time was sketchy, but for the most part I could tell you are a good writer. Everything is easy to understand and realistic. Nice job.

Crap.

After so many detentions, she's going to get suspended or something! At least, that's the way it usually goes, from what I'm used to...

Carrie is such a... well, I have too many names to call her that I could get taken off fiction press for, so let's not even go there.

Urgh! Please update soon! You've got me biting my fingernails about this situation!

Whoa, her brother kept it from her? For FOUR years??

Whoa!

Poor Justin and Lauren. They must feel terrible to have a best friend they can't make happy. But I don't understand why Nick gets all defensive when someone close to her is worried.

You've got one really good story up here, on my faves!

Farewell,

*silent darkness*

I really enjoy reading this for the reality of it. You always have stories that a person has a perfect world and then it crashes, but this one... I don't know. I just really like it.

omg, I would hate to be Lauren... but who doesn't feel that way?

Good ending for a chapter, leaves a bit of a cliffhanger there.

Onto the next chapter!

Farewell,

*silent darkness*

Hm...

This was a good introduction of Nick. I liked how you seperated the information about her personality so it didn't seem like an autobiography.

One thing I noticed was stuck together words and some run on sentences. I really don't care about those things, just as long as the point comes across, but you might want to take a little more time. You see, this chapter was pretty long, which is good, but in your author's note, you said you were going to try to update everyday. That's great if you already have the story written, but not so great if you're still writing it. You shouldn't be pressured or too hasty to write and post. Take your time, relax, and feel the writing go through you.

I know that sounded really corny and stupid, but you get my point, right?

I'm interested in this story, I like it. I can't wait to read another chapter!

Farewell,

*silent darkness*