Flechette
2006-05-19
ch 1,  | abuseUm... okay... don't really get this one... I like alot of it like the part that goes "now I'm crying and you're all just laughing at a lost child with no place to go" that was excellent! but some of the things were kind of misplaced like the "get me the hell outta here" was kind of weird and the whole "and I don't have a map to look at this time" was kind of strange too... I don't know... I think it is an awesome message... I just think it could have a lot more straight forward meaning and a lot more raw emotion... sorry for the bad review... it really is a good poem overall! |
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