LOL it was a nice story. The summary was really intriging and that reeled me in and the story wasn't what I expected but I can't complain it disappointed. The ending was cute too haha.

"I'm not weird or anything."

That was so cute! I really liked it...sweet and innocent and just adorable. :)

aw...so cute!

xx
Ali

Good work!

sweet

I can't completely relate to this but I can on some level because I had a long time crush on a guy who took the same bus as I did in the mornings. I never got to talk to him of course because I noticed him too late. I moved a couple months after I got a crush on him. Ah well. =D

Nice work, by the way.

gulistanlik

Cute and creative. Simple yet kinda sophisticated writing, and awesome plot. I love this because it's cute, and I love fluff. Hehehe. I'm very glad Queen of Absolutely Everything added this to our c2, and of course, that you wrote this. (:

I agree with her, the tenth bus ride was pretty nice :p
xoxox

this was really cute!! but, i felt like him asking her out was a little fast, they didnt have enough interaction... and the whole thing with the 10 bus pass thing, isent that pre-paid? so why does she sill pay when she gets on?

Aww this was really cute.
I like how the bus rides were numbered, and I liked how it ended.
Good job.

I didn't even noticed the repitition, being too caught up in the story and all. This is wonderful. Short and sweet. Gasp. :) Need I say more?

wow, as far as writing exercises go, i absolutely loved this =D ... in fact, even if it hadn't been one, i would have loved it anyway! i did get a little put off in the beginning by the huge chunky paragraphs (i'm feeling a little flighty), but i forced my way through it, and i definitely can't say that i'm disappointed!! hehehe, it was a fantastic story, with a fantastic ending, and i just thought i'd let you know that i really enjoyed reading it =) hope you had as much fun writing it!!

Haha, that was cute. Kudos for a cute, succinct story!

Really good :-)

Loved it. Ahh wouldnt it be great if all the cute boys on the bus talked to us. xD