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| life like whoa 2006-12-01 ch 1,   | I really liked this rhyme scheme that you used, it's really hard to get all of it to rhyme without losing the point you were trying to get across. In the begining it seemed a little shaky but there after the first few lines you really nailed it with a much nicer flow. (In the first line "Don't stop wlaking,.." did you mean "Don't stop WALKING,.."?) Just something that caught my eye. But good poem! |
| burning in effigy 2006-05-20 ch 1, | Ending was fantastic, sort of like coming to a conclusion about something also, you have a typo in the first line, "wlaking" --> walkingthought you might want to know overall, good poem :) |