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| Forlorn Will 2006-07-03 ch 1,  | abuseI liked this story a lot, although I just have one critique. Instead of explaining the metaphor for the waves of the ocean applying to the guy, you should've just left it open to the imagination. It captures the mystery of the oceans more. But it wasn't a major thing, and it reminds me of someone in my life. thanks for writing a review on one of my peices.-Forlorn Will |
| Dragen Eyez 2006-05-30 ch 1, | abusehmm... grammar could use some work; it tended to interupt the flow at some points. However, it's a sweet story, if a bit sad. Hopeless love.. [sigh] ^__^ |
| A.H. Fenald 2006-05-20 ch 1, | abuseI thought this story was sweet yet sad because he couldn't find the words to tell her...it made me want to cry... |
| square root 2006-05-20 ch 1, | abuseI like the ideas in this piece. I really think you should watch your summaries though, because you should NEVER bash your story in the summary. How are you going to make people want to read it if you say "I dont really like it but..." or beg people to read and review. I don't know about everyone else, but usually when I see 'R&R' I'm less inclined to do so. Be confident! Believe that people will read your work without you seeming desperate for them. And keep writing! I like your songs and poetry. |
| LiveToTheFullest 2006-05-20 ch 1, | abuseI don't know why you think it is so bad that you should be forgiven. It's pretty good. There was a few typos, but not much else. I liked it. |