i liked it. it flowed well and had a strong and interesting meaning! i also like how it started are real attention grabber!

Short and to the point. Nicely worded. Great job! I love it.

You spelt tired wrong. But it's probably a typo from writing too fast or something. Don't want to be one to criticize. :) Nonetheless this poem is good in standards.

xoxo

Hilmary-Oceans

I like the flow and mostly the ending line "And who you'll never be." That says a lot, especially since people mostly break up and move away from each other because the other person can no longer fit their standards, or be how they once were. Also, just by reading you can estimate just WHAT they'll never be. Good work.

short, simple, vague; but generalisable. reminiscant of linkin park.

proofread. proofread. proofread. add more imagery. give the reader some clues about what you're trying to express. right now it's flat. there's essentially no sensory info...just hackneyed sentences. make it different and more interesting.