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SplinterX 2007-10-10 ch 1,	abuseImpressive detail. I really got a feel for the man, not so much the woman, but its probably better that way. I enjoyed this piece quite a bit. the whole dream thing was kind of confusing, but I assumed the blue orb had something to do with his wife, but he couldn't grab it. I like the cliffhanger ending; i was not too sure if he died, or simply died in the dream. As I write this, I'm starting to wonder if the blue orb symbolizes his sanity or his love for his wife. Either way, the many ways to interpret the orb distinguishes you as a good author. Good Work.
merrymowmow 2006-09-29 ch 1,	abuseI was wondering when you're going to update ' Delusional Alibi'
How was i supposed to noe t... 2006-07-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseM, i think the changes between each scene could be smoother, slightly jerky at times. Creepy, tho. Very creepy.When u say, "She would have died." it gets a little confusing...didn't she already die?i like the symbolism there, although mebe you overdid it with the whole "glass orb" thing. That was very confusing. At first, i thought it was just there for a filler....It wasn't, was it? =Sanyway, otherwise, very good. i liked it. especially how you posted the dream sections. very real. Too many ppl ruin a dream by describing it in bold outlines, with none of the blurred edges and /knowing/ but not why, that is altogether too logical and...undreamlike in a story. Nice work, there. Keep it up!
allyburner 2006-07-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseYeah, I know - it's a bit late. But, hey! No worries, rite? It only counts for 20%, rite? he... he... oh... god. Anyhow, I think, as I have always thought, that it was beautiful. Extrodinary. I notice you spelt blond/e in two ways, with/out the 'e'. Um... yeah, the first description of her hair, put a comma in between all those adjectives. And... yeah. :D Not much help, am I? :D -Ally B.
Striped Candycane 2006-05-21 ch 1,	abuseNice...I liked how this told you a lot, but not everything. The dreams or visions were a nice touch...it could probably use some more metaphors though. It was a nice piece all in all, however. Thumbs up!

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