hey, long time no review...LOL
this is yuki...

Is kolie/nichole still a depressed kid?

yuki's still but i'm trying to overcome it...ToT/ Ganbatte nee...

anyway, i love your poem...

it's beautiful in an SM way though...hm...

love,
yuki

Interesting. This is almost more of prose than poetry... the parallelism makes it sound like a speech, maybe a monologue. Your images could use some more sensory detail to get your reader to see, hear, touch, and taste with you, but this is very nice by itself.

Thanks for sharing this!

abby