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| MarvellousMarvin 2007-05-16 ch 1,   | this is another really good one. i love the seeming unrelatedness but there was a thread that linked them all. it was really quite amazing. really nice! |
| Icarus-Rising 2007-05-09 ch 5, | Lua! I think thats the title of your bright eyes reference (we are the same, you and I : we both quote connor in our writings some how) some of your lines gave me goosebumps |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 5, | red is for second and roses but i am partial to blue days and cross friends (at least they talk) oh, that's smart. second place and red roses and god, i'm in love with that link. ( &i love "lua") |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 4, | there's no hatred lost here. words that break the bones taste so good on the tongue. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 3, | cigarettes, perhaps? we always try to kill ourselves to please the ones with love. i wouldn't have realized what this was about if not for the author's note. but nice metaphor then. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 2, | "He moaned I love you and creacking Back through hinge in my throat,(maybe I mumbled) I don't..." the sometimes rhymes are intoxicating in this. |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 1, | super sweet imagery. "the beads/dropped with the scattered petals/of the flowers she killed." the murder of flowrs. i love that. |
| sunday night sky 2006-10-27 ch 5, | 'I felt sick someday in September/ The kind where it doesn't hurt at all;' I love those lines. They seem vague, as though they are touching on something which hurts. I love references to personal things; strawberry lip balm, medal, 'red is for second and roses but i am partial to blue days'. Beautifully, carefully detailed. Gorgeous. Keep writing :D |
| faerie-gumdrops 2006-09-27 ch 1, | 'And spilled her heart over hands intoall of it' Loved that line. The words kind of reminded me of being sick, if that makes any sense. Still, great imagery. |
| dodi ma 2006-09-15 ch 5, | "red is for second and roses/but i am partial to blue days/and cross friends" I've had an idea like this before and you pulled it off, really, a lot better than I could have.It's an interesting poem. |
| lackluster 2006-09-11 ch 5, | the first and last stanzas are deliciously perfect. plus, as i just realized, they rhyme :) |
| lucifer burning 2006-09-06 ch 5, | why is it always strawberry or cherry lip balm? odd. writers write fiction and truth and this review makes no sense. love it. his strings may break but this is not the end. |
| citrus scented 2006-08-30 ch 5, | "and if my throat is raw from all these berating consequencesi still will long for you.the "you" with an empty sigh"- love that. "writers write fictionbut what am i if i write nothing at all?" ... this is going to haunt me for a while i can tell. wow these are all so thoughtprovoking and just...continuie to bemuse and impress me at the same time. wow. |
| lackluster 2006-08-30 ch 4, | i think the last two lines came out perfect, actually(refering to your note) |
| breezy nostrils 2006-08-28 ch 5, | writers write fiction but what am i if i write nothing at all - those lines were sheer brillance. nice work. |