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| The Only Hellbat Left 2006-10-19 ch 1,  | abuselovely. dark and protective. I like it. Keep it up. |
| Alexander d'Alkemade 2006-05-23 ch 1, | abuseRight on Dogstarman, try using figurative language or other "poetic" devices.Keep Trying |
| sueb262 2006-05-22 ch 1, | abuseWow! YOUR "falling through the looking glass" has a distinctly more dangerous edge to is than Carroll's! The images in this are powerful and raw, and quite inventive: I particularly liked the twist of the black throughts from the slashing shards "drying" into another kind of wound altogether. And, as always, the underlying idea of having to protect those around you from yourself: how tragic to think that the one being damaged is the dangerous one, the monster; that the "friends" are not there to stop the bleeding, remove the embedded glass, bind up the wounds, kiss away the tears. |
| feeling the pain 2006-05-22 ch 1, | abuseVERY GOOD GREAT WORD CHOICE THERES REAL TALENT THERE KEEP ON WRITIN R&R ME |