awesome job on this! i love how the tune kept coming up. so cool! and i LOVE the reversal of reader expectation. i totally thought her lover had died! i almost cried actually. this story was great :D really nice work! you're a great writer. wow. there was actually no real dialogue in this! that takes talent! the plot is so unique. nice work!

Cute story. It's very classic, but not as detailed as it could be (details make it stand apart from similar stories such as Princess Bride).

It's alright as a one shot, but in the future, you should try showing instead of telling the story--that way the reader can become more involved. In 'telling', you're downplaying the action, and moving the tale along too quickly. Anyhow, I'm not complaining about the writing. Keep working on it--don't give up.

I hope that didn't sound mean; it's meant only as goodwilled advise.

Happy writing.