Very good. Lots of nice imagery here. It's sad but at the same time there's hope to it. It's very admirable how you can use so few words and yet convey enormous points. Nice job with this one.

oh my god. These jorios are absolutely beautiful. You've created art here.

Thanks for your review on my own poem!

I love your method for writing poetry, and I think this one in particular is very beautiful. I'll definitely read more of these, as they seem very intriguing!

i really like this! is that how u spell frailly? it looks wrong... but its probs right... anyways, i love the atmosphere and the first two lines are great :D nice piece.