Pssh, they are so NOT mary-sueish. I mean, you've only just introduced most of the characters- we hardly even know them yet!

Cliched? I don't think so. Perhaps using the mirror excuse to describe Roxanne was a bit cliche, but other than that this is well-written so far. A bit choppy, though.

so i felt like a jerk because i never return reviews, and i picked this one because i'm slightly intimidated by the length of crimson eyes (but i will get to it! eventually...)

but yeah this is very good! i'm intrigued by your characters and i want to know more about this family!

update soon!

Mazzie

So, yeah, it's been a while. It's still good, but I had to catch up by reading the chapter before it again... so UPDATE *hint hint*. But yeah. I'm actually surprised that it hasn't changed- the style is still the same and everything. Takes skill.

See you,

-Rachel

Still gritty, still realistic, still compulsively entertaining. You haven't lost your touch, girl. Love this chapter, it's so well-written. Update soonage! :D x

I'm really, really not happy it's taken you so long to update this story. In fact I'm so pissed off I've removed you from my alerts and blocked you on msn. Bye!

Just kidding :P

OMG, this is AMAZING! And I'm not just saying that! It's really like I'm actually there seeing it all happen. The characters, emotion, dialogue and description make it completely believable; I've absolutely nothing to criticise! It's really easy to empathise with Roxanne and I genuinely look forward to reading more so don't keep us hanging so long this time!

Tty soon :D xx

Love it girl, its going well. Not been updating for a while eithier so its kl. You express the characters feelings well. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

Well, GOD! Somebody's got some nerve! I always hated the bullies.. picking on someone to make themselves feel stronger. All it does is show everyone listening that they are the ones who are hypocrites. Sorry... little bit of a rant there.

I'm SO glad you updated. I love this one. Real life, but not overdone, you know? I like how you always end ith her thoughts- it gives perspective of what she's actually thinking of what just happened.

I don't think it was a filler, I though it was a good chapter. KW!

-Rachel

WOW. This chapter is absoluely EXTRABULENDASTIC (excellent/extravagant/fabulous/splendid/fantastic )! Seriously though, I disagree with your saying that it is an awkward chapter, or indeed a filler, because now that we've met Roxanne's mother (whom I realised somehow even before her name is mentioned), and you've given us a glimpse of the relationship they share, the reader feels a lot more empathy for Roxanne. Argh, that's very poorly explained. What I mean is, you've shaped Roxanne's character a lot more fully through the introduction of her mother and their relationship. (Why couldn't I just say that?)

Very realistic dialoguing, yet again. Kudos to you! :P (What does 'kudos' mean?) I would like to know what's up with Tony, and whether or not Roxanne will discover Trix's 'personal property.' But of course, she IS going to, isn't she...? :D

Why the fuck is there so much fucking swearing in this fucking chapter? Only kidding, it adds great effect. Many kudoses to you!

Sorry for the rather belated review, by the way.

Anyway, UPDATE SHORTFULFULLY!

lol yup a little weird spot to end but who am I to judge? update soon!

I won't even mention the time it's been, because that would be kind of hypocritical.

Well, wow. Poor Trix, I can't imagine having to live life that way. I wonder, does John bust into her house, steal money, and bash her on the head often?

This is quite complicated. Very good start. Can't wait for your next update!

Oh, yeah... about my updates... I'm pretty ashamed of them... so.. . you can take your sweet time on reviewing mine... you don't exactly have to, but...

Farewell!

*silent darkness*

What's the "Tony incident"? If it's the phone call then that's extremely confusing, but if it's something deeper in Roxanne and Tony's history on which you will or perhaps won't expand in the future, then that makes sense. The line "Tony ditched school when I explained..." threw me a bit.

This is an interesting chapter. Great joke from Jeff, by the way, though it was rather vulgar. lol. Dialogue is superb, as usual. Plus, I disagree completely with the idea that writers should avoid Mary Sue characters; most of the world comprises Mary Sues!

Anyway, good chapter - update soon!

interesting...whats going on? I what to know! Please update...

Hey L. I never did review this, did I? Here goes.

i like how you've continued with the realism of the first chapter. Your descriptions have stayed good, capturing the reader, and i think you're well on your way to a very 'brill' piece of work. Pls continue to update; i'm anxious to read more.

Cheerio

Again, not your usual style, but I like! It's really good! I'd write a longer review, but I'm so tired right now none of it would make much sense! hee hee. But super super chapter! Love it! And update soon!

The Scottish Dragon

P.S. I'm DYING for the end of Crimson Eyes!