I hate sad endings. I would have loved this story if it wasn't such a sad ending, even though it could've made it sound perverse. If only.

It's like that stage where you love your father and want to marry him but she never outgrew that. I think it's a little gross not because that they are "father and daughter" after all, they aren't really related by blood, think of Alex and Adrian from Reasons and Romance if you disagree. It's just, I feel like he's a complete pedo. She's 16 and he's 40 but he seems to know that there's a line that he can't cross too.

it was really intriguing and unique but it was sorta creepy...and gross
i noe he's not exactly her father but it was still wrong for him to like her that way

amazingly written

Ilia was certainly... interesting. Your writing was a bit confusing at times but, for the most part, it was still good. The uniqueness of the story was what drew me to it in the first place, and I'm quite happy to say that I did enjoy it. Some parts could have been better but, on the whole, good job.

~BlackPetal

I absolutely love this story. I was literally reading it with my mouth half open, intrigued in what was happening. You're a brilliant writer! Keep up the awesome work.

i like it.

A bit creepy, but well written. I don't think she loved Frank. I think she was just marrying him to escape the kiss, to prove to herself and David that he has no hold on her other than the fatherly sort. Odds are they'll divorce after two years.

heyy! nice story. all though, and im sure you've heard this countless times, it was a bit disturbing. i mean they're not a real father and child but it's still...weird. i think they both loved each other. she kissed him back that time and sad looks from her were mention in the end just before she left. i dont think she loved frank. she'll probably divorce him in a few years after marriage. maybe she'll come back to her father and they'll get married and move away far far away from everyone who knows them. but then again, the last line says she finally left him with nothing but memories so i guess they weren't meant to be together despite the love. one thing is for sure though, im never putting my kids up for adoption. lol, have a nice evening!

-Michelle

It was a good story, and very well-written. Honestly, the plot of the story was a little disturbing, but I can overlook that for the most part. Great story!

Chrissa: The only part I integrated into my story from another source was the bit about Vivian unable to have children because of breast cancer. I got that idea from the book Mrs. Kimble. The rest is all original, I promise. However, I'm curious about the other story you mentioned, the one that you said was like mine. Please email me if you have more information on this story. Thanks. :)

I'm reluctant to review, since there are certain parts of your story that are uncannily similar to another story I've read.

Was this somehow influenced by another story?

That is so sad. I dont think she loved him back I think that night she just needed to feel accepted by David so she let him kiss her. I dont think she was in love with Frank either, I just dont think she found the right guy yet. but thats just what I got out of it. It was really good though. It was amazing.--Analeigh

Great wording, but the story was a bit disturbing. Yet, you string words together in a flawless pattern.

Wow. Absolutely amazing. Really well-written, if a bit creepy. I loved the ending sentence, it fit so well with the piece.