Okay, then. There's very good "sheltered" emotion in this--that is, you don't go completely crazy on me about animal rights and stuff. It makes sense, though, that the emotion is held back, much like the animals are held back in cages.

I'm not crazy about the poem's form. It seems a little too free for my tastes, and for its own subject. I might suggest a structure for a poem like this, just so it would mesh better with the subject matter.

J

(p.s... Thanks for the review on "Your eyes are priceless." It's one of the few poems I've actually written about my OWN emotions, and I'm never good at articulating what I'm feeling. It's good to get actual criticism, though. Many thanks.)

The poem has a feeling of being trapped. The ending, which is meant to represent a hopeful escape and freedom, doesn't quite get there. It seems like the ending is caught in the doorway. If you extend the ending with a more potent punch, perhaps it would have that escape that you intended. I like the message of the poem, though. Too many aspects of life seems to encroach on personal boundaries.

i like

Great work. The choppy flow was great, it added to the frantic feel of the poem. This is a powerful, edgy piece. Excellent job.