slight rhyme going on, and i like how you were still able to add imagery even though your poem is fairly short.

concise and nice (haha rhyme was unintentional); nice job :]

and thanks for your review from a while back

This one, is hard to peg. Usually, when rhyming in poems, you stick to a basic rule, or principle.
For example, AbAb, or AbAc or A. Meaning that every ending word rhymes, every other word rhymes, A rhymes with A, B rhymes with B. In this poem, this rule is offset. You have ABAA wich is a little hard to read.
The ideas in the poem are good, and expressed accordingly.
Nice job,
-Red

Two things - you don't need the "the" before "freight trains" on the first line in my opinion and on the last line do you mean "dirt broke" or "dirty, broke"?

Otherwise, I love the simple accumulation of images. I wouldn't mind it expanded a touch but there's something beautiful about the gritty images contrasted with the carefree nature of this poem. Nicely done.

Midnight