This has a wonderfully fast pace. The.. font changey things... what are they called? anyway, they're subtle and I love it. The fewer number of syllables in the last line emphasise the ending well. You're very good.

You mix-mesh bold and italics with a eloquence all your own; it is so lovely to read.

Gorgeous, simply, gorgeous.

* Noelle

Pretty. Oh so very very pretty. This poem is too pretty and beautiful and amazing.

wow, fast paced, brutal, intense, and burning burning burning. scorching. tightly and quality written. love it.

pure beauty in verse. my favorite lines are "indiscretion personified and very (very) pure/like what you wish you were before" your rhyme is gentle and doesn't have to be forced. i like that it only sometimes rhymes.

Interesting format; loved the ending

very nicely written poem

Very unique and interesting I should say, I love your word choice and especially my favorite is the last line. Once again, this is a very unique poetry writing style. I like it.

- Captive Spirit

cool...i luved it.