This seems very tragic, but very real (which I suppose makes it all the more tragic). Apart from that, though, I love the format this is written in. Hope this poem dosen't reflect your emotions right now.

Peace, Daze

thats evocative and so sad. but written very well, and a beautiful/tragic idea if it was created. but if it's nonfictional, its no less beautiful. but you should be more like :D that, less like :( that. a fine poem.

:D;)

love, c.induced.

Well this places me into thinking... and I like poems that make me think. Great work, the format is very unique and that's really cool. Keep it up!

umm... the format is a little weird...