Hmm...is okay compared to most of your other work. I'll note this in mind.

Reaper

suck your as.s elizabeth ugly

maria stared at...

I'm going to keep this story in mind because it looks promising. ;

I'd like to add that you're doing alot of character development in the early pages which is good - But I think you should choose one PoV for it, because the change is disorientating and distracting, just a little.

That and I can't wait for them to stop talking.

Anticipation of the title. Thank you for this story insofar.

Aside from it ending in the middle of a sentence, it was awesome :) Definitely keep writing!

Freaky, but the chapter ended on an unfinished note. It's definitely well-written. I applaud your originality. _