That was very will written, and a little freakish. Transhuman combinations of man and machine are always wierd, and this is no exception. I think it's kind of odd that you just theorize all of these developments coming from the creation of a human/machine hybrid, and there's not much of a link. If the story flashed forward to the future, to see if this glorious technocratic wonderland came about, or not, that would give this story a bit more closure. Other than that, I enjoyed it a lot. It had a great concept and fantastic writing.

A strong end there. It feels like the beginning of something much larger.

Wow. This story gave me shivers. Excellent. I liked the little introduction to background at the beginning.

A superb piece of work - intriguing and definitely worth a follow-up.

I can find no glaringly obvious faults here - just what I'd expect from you. Would also like to thank you for 'SciFi for Dummies' and 'Martial Arts For Complete and Utter Morons'

Like the Voltaire quote. Keep writing.

Interesting story. Is this a stand alone or the beginning to a new story? Either way you did an excellent job with this.

Shadowhound