 wheresthespacekey 2006-05-30 . chapter 1a bit choppy for a play. '**' was nicely used to portray tom's character, but there are other ways to do that. it felt as if '**' was used a bit often.
besides that, i actually really liked it. very appropriate, for the characters were well rounded and there weren't too many of them. i loved the content of the dialogue - the cactus/cacti was great, i laughed out loud. |