Beautiful piece. A few typos here and there ("you" instead of "your in the 2nd line, and using "will" twice as line enders...rhyming them with each other is the problem there), but for the most part, really gorgeous. Some of the alliteration in here is pefect ("satin silk stretching" and "send you streamlined straight" really stick out to me), and the images are divine. Keep writing! :)

the last three lines really got to me. mostly the last one after the two before it. this was amazingly written. i'm pretty much astounded by you right now.

i love it. you are incredible, miss kiley.

the whole dots thing and all teh descriptions are beautiful.. awesome piece

"a boy that I like and could love: dial up through corkscrewwires and send you streamlined straightto me."

oh so good. delectable in the deepest meaning of the word. you rock my poetic world, eileen.

That's just...wow. Amazing. The words loop and slide in my mind like puddles of time reflecting...love.