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| Friend of the ABC 2007-12-18 ch 4,  | abuseWow, this is really good. You seldom read of Christian or Biblical stories on Fictionpress. It's so full of detail. Keep up the good work and please update soon! :-) |
| L. MacAdder 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abuseEh, it's a decent begining. It's somewhat disjointed, but by the end I got an idea of what was going on. The only issue I have with it is Rahab's age: "only thirty" wouldn't exist in ancient societies. Thirty would be considered a feat of nature, and no longer young, considering most people died in their thirties. If you want her to be relatively old, I would say make her twenty instead. |
| Elavielle 2007-12-14 ch 4, | abuseA very interesting story and well written! update soon! |
| zagato 2007-07-26 ch 3, | abuseI like your story and have read the tale of Rahab in the Bible. Thank you and please update. |
| Kohlomere 2007-01-06 ch 4, | abuseMarvelous! Now I'm sad to say that I didn't notice that you updated before now. You did a great job! |
| Nicci 2006-11-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseA very interesting take on the story. So far it sounds interesting and well-written!:) |
| Kohlomere 2006-11-12 ch 3, | abuseNow I'm normally not a big fan of biblical tales, but I must say that this is fantastic! I sincerely hope you update soon, E. |
| faery tragedy 2006-06-29 ch 3, | abuseHey, I don't blame you for taking a little artistic license to change a couple of things. The Bible's a little screwy with the dates anyway. I actually went to thebricktestament.com and got myself familiar with this. Anyway, this chapter was nicely-written and polished as usual. Rahab's fear and sort of...lack of confidence here in the chapter is interesting and comes out as a little character flaw to balance out her independence later in her life. *faery tragedy |
| Sarika 2006-06-12 ch 3, | abuseThis gets more interesting. I wans't aware of the time gap. I don't see anything I need to pick apart (hurray!). I hope you update soon. Keep up the splendid work.- Sarika P.S. I don't usually advertise, but I've got a Biblical-ish story too, if you are interested. It's called "Serpent Tongue". |
| Sarika 2006-06-12 ch 2, | abuseHello! I had a vague of idea of where you might be going- I just was curious as to how you would get wherever that was. Anyhoo, I liked this chapter. I like how you've described the time in your writing- like the descriptions of Rahab's life in Jericho. The dialogue is also believable, which is sometimes hard to do in these sorts of stories. Thanks for the note, too, by the way. Have a nice day!- Sarika |
| faery tragedy 2006-06-05 ch 2, | abuseThis is constructed very well. I like how you pay attention to detail and try to make it seem as period-esque as possible. Books are the next best thing to time machines, right? I like Rahab so far; she seems very self-sufficient and confident. I can't stand those waifish female protagonists. I don't know much about this Bible story, but I'm interested to read more. *faery tragedy |
| Sarika 2006-05-30 ch 1, | abuseRahab seems like an interesting character... I'm just a little puzzled as to where you're going with this. I think this was well written, save for a few teeny parts of dialogue that felt too modern for me (then again, I'm just picky!). I love Biblical-esque stories so I shall read more when I have the time... Happy writing!- Sarika |
| anonymous 2006-05-28 ch 1, anon. | abusei really like it! update soon! |