Hahaha, I love this story so much! Jack is hilarious, I have quite the crush on him.

I love this-it sounds really good and seems to be really funny. I'm curious though...where'd you get the Seelie Court and Unseelie court thing from?

This had me in fits of laughter, especially 'it tastes as ambrosia'. I hope you update soon - I really want to know what happens to Jack.

GOOD START! The characters are well-thought out, the plot is original but still familiar enough not to be confusing, and the grammar is good. My only comments would be to perhaps have more place description, and longer chappies hehehe. Definitely keep working on this!

Ah, you have the high end of the fae, and I write about the lowlifes. Oh well.

Ah, and Jack has no questions about the lephrechaun! And Lucky Charms for lunch. This is most unorthodox indeed.

It is a fun little story.

Yeah, we girls do have a thing for those pointed ears.

So, Jack was never human? Okay, then he doesn't need to smell of the unwashed.

Again, I am rather impressed with the knowledge of the fae and what not.

Rhia's comment about school was funny. I liked that one.

Ah, would this be a circle of salt? There are some weird thoughts there. Indeed, Rhia is a bit of a nut for inviting this psycho to her bedroom . . . oh, I figured that he would have to be hot.

A couple comments to make. If Jack is from an ancient time, bathing was not a normal practice (well, depending upon where he was from, but I would assume that he was a European.)

Another comment, you should have taken a bit more time with the registration. It ended very abruptly.

All the same, the story is rather amusing.

Poor Jack. He's so confused. I love how you have incorporated the things of folklore into this story. I could have done a few smart remarks for Jack here, but it is your story. he really needs to learn Modern English.

The bit about the Seelie Court has me interested. So, I bite.

It was a funny little piece. I can imagine how embarrassing this whole thing is. I love Rhia, though. Is it just a funny coincidence with the name?

Was the hero told to seek Ms. Winter by the Court? And did they give him his new clothes. They are just too kind. They should have sent him to the Mortal World with no clue!!

Ha this had me laughing, at the end he was all awkward and I could just picture the embarassed look on his face. Cute.

I love what you have so far [: The plot so far is engaging, and it's really, really original, which is nice. It's well written, too, and the dialogue is sublime. The only thing I'd suggest is maybe a little bit more character development? But I'm sure that'll come later in your story.

Very nicee.

Haha, very humorous beginning.

OHEMGEE. This is a better chapter than the last one!

I love, LOVE the way Jack is, in his innocence or ignorance, commenting on human society ("... this is truely an institution of slavery..."). In just a sentance or two he's summed up what most students feel on a daily basis- without even fully understanding the "big picture". He just says it like it is, because he doesn't know any better.

Jack's my new favorite character, of ever. 8D

The part about avoiding adult scrutiny is especially well-written and entirely true. If you avoid certain behaviors, you'll pass right under their radar. Do the wrong this or that one too many times, and they'll never forget you. Ever.

She's going to let him live with her, isn't she? Not immidiatly, but eventually... That's my prediction, anyway. :files prediction for the coming revelations:

I love this story :does the dance of joy:

This is so hilarious- the dialouge between "Jack" and Rhia is comical, and the difficulties he encounters with the human world are endearing. Anyone who understands the Seelie/Unseelie courts knows that giving out your name is not advisable, but this is the first time /I've/ seen it applied to a modern situation. And it's HYSTERICAL. I laughed until I cried.

I also like Rhia's street-savvy persona; I don't think I would have known what to say in a situation like hers. It makes her into a "knightly" kind of character, since it's her that's rescuing Jack all the time.

I have no doubt he'll eventually get to return the favor... ;D

Oh, I just love stories like this! It's rare for people to use the old words, let alone spell them properly! I think you did a great job.

The only critique I have is that you need a bit more explaination about the settings It was confusing even though it was only the first chapter.