|Reviews for Tall Ships Departure|
| steev 5/27/06 . chapter 1
L2- "until"L4- "ships" should be in its possessive form, or change "departure" to "depart" (which is more active, less boring, also)
If you don't look like you give a shit about your poetry, why should anyone else?
The line breaks at L2 & L3 are bad.
"forests of masts" is cliched.