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| Xn-v 2006-09-20 ch 1,  | abuseWow... just ... wow... This has got to be the best poem I've read so far. Firstly, the imagery is amazing - beautifully constructed. I also liked the repetition, I think that worked perfectly. Your insight into the whole concept was really very interesting and thoughtful - I loved it. I loved it! No other words for it... =] |
| Kaldaka 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseWow. I was really amazed at the depth of this poem. It made me smile and it made me cry (well- almost). Great work! |
| Freed by Mercy 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abuseQuite beautifully written. I enjoyed it - especially the setting as it changed over the seasons and years showing the story. Lovely read. I noticed in the second to last stanza that you wrote "winder gale". Did you mean "winter gale" instead? Thank you for your critique of "Stained Glass Tears". |
| Jobey 2006-06-30 ch 1, | abuse(This is Jolly Beggar again, at last figuring on signing in for her last review of the day.) Yay for hyphenated adjectives! "The petal-scenteed summer breeze" was my favorite line--possibly my favorite all month, in fact--and I got to see it twice. Wicked. (And yay also for Tennyson! I don't care if my English teacher does think he was too "nice and flowery and conventional" - I can't help liking - most - of it anyway.) Also nice job on varying structure by way of varying stanza length. Boo on having the bluejays sing the girl's thoughts for her. I'm not wild about the theme, because it seems to take away too much from a person who really lies (like the guy in this poem, for instance!). The one good thing is that it made the girl a bit more tragic than pathetic, because it's more "her fault." (It may not have been your intent to assign blame with this theme, but that's how it came across as.) But this here is all very subjective and not even very clear even to myself, so you can safely forget it, and treat yourself to a glow of happiness in having given a reader a fun two minutes today. Keep on scribbling. Yours,J. |
| Driderqueen 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseWOW! that was possibly the greatest poem i've ever read on FP! Man, u've got talent, lady! I liked it, it touched my heart, made me cry inside...nice really well written! |
| myheartwantsyou 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abusetruely reminiscent of lies. i like the way you told a story with it in a way. very well written. you have a real talent |
| alice is dying 2006-05-30 ch 1, | abuseI love this! The message is just phenomenal! I love how you put it into words, and how the poem just seems to flow. I've never been good at that, but you make it seem as if nothing could be(/come) easier (to you). This is going on my favorites. |