Reviews for Seasons of Nature

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A E Mann 2007-06-07 ch 2, anon.	abuseYo. Don't have alotof time here-just want to say that ill be witing for you to get farther into this story. later. FTP
hermion8 2007-06-01 ch 2,	abusehi!! i'm really sorry about the PM...this has a nice plot, but if you're feeling forced...i'm so sorry!!
Running Sunrise 2007-05-30 ch 2,	abuseoh What will happen when the sister's a reunited? The end of the world?! Also, if this does take place "somewhere in Europe," why do all of the characters have Asian names? TTNR!
Running Sunrise 2007-05-30 ch 1,	abuseThe line "So Mote it Be" sounds like something they say in Tamora Pierce's books. Have you ever read them? In any case... Work your setting a little more. "A fictional place in Europe" doesn't tell us much. Once you know the setting, it helps to see what type of people would populate it and helps the reviewers like myself tell you if its believeable or not, also what time period does this take place in?
a.e. mann 2007-05-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseholy crap you updated. Or...uh...re-did. Still, it's better than nothin. --I couldn't use my real account because technically i already reviewed this chapter once-- Since it was so long ago that i read the original, it sounds the same to me but somewhat more readable..if that's a word. Since i know what's going on, it doesn't all sound like gibberish to me. update soon. FTP
wolfblood82 2007-01-03 ch 1,	abuseHeya there! It's me again! ^^ Anyway, guess you're not expecting me, huh? XD Anyway, on with the review. Ok, I can see that this story is a totally different take compared to the previous two I've reviewed before. Anyway, I do find the idea of personalizing (sp?) the four seasons rather original. At least this won't cross my mind... and yeah, the ritual seems rather interesting to me for some reason in a literature sense. I really wonder what's the Dead and Evil in this story are about. Anyway, this is all I can say given that it's a bit of a short chapter. But anyway, thanks for your reviews up till now and I hope we can exchange more reviews in the near future! :)
Niki Tori 2006-12-29 ch 3,	abuseAnother good chappie...I like this story. It has a good flow...it doesn't feel disconnected something I am working on. Well Until NeXt Time LoVe You!! Niki!!
Niki Tori 2006-12-29 ch 2,	abuseThis was a nice chappie!! I am glad to read your work...it's been awhile since I have. How are you anyways? Well that's totally off topic...Nice chapter...I am going on to the next one. Until NeXt Time LoVe Ya Niki!!
LostPuppy 2006-11-12 ch 1, anon.	abusewhere's your summary??
Teffie 2006-11-08 ch 7,	abuseWow, Jewel and Lula met! Yay! Or, at least, I hope that's good. O_o A few corrections: "She cursed herself of forgetting that her mother was still." Still what? "She sniffed around to find any evidence of weed, but it was all clear." But wasn't she smoking a cigarette? "She told her to stop ambling, but she disregarded her warning. With that, she swiftly slapped her on the left cheek." This part's a little confusing. It's hard to tell which "she" you're talking about. "She rubbed Sliver’s neck softly, the dog tried to lick her on her face, yet Nita flinched." So is the dog named Silver or Scott? This sentence is also a run on; you need a period after softly. "She hated dog slobber, yet sometimes she would exception for it." I'm not exactly sure what you're saying here...o_O This might just be a stupid-me thing, though. "Jewel was on a concert that was Destiny Rose." This doesn't really sound right...Maybe you should say "Jewel was at a Destiny Rose concert". "The band hadn’t stared yet, but Jewel had to find her friends before my people crowded the place." I don't think you meant to say "my" there. "She inhaled the cigar once more, and then took it out. Jewel couldn’t help but watched her." Again, wasn't she smoking a cigarette? And "watched" should be "watch". "The gothic girl checked out Jewel’s outfit. A plain black short, along with ripped jeans." I think you mean "shirt", not "short". And you should put a semicolon after outfit, since the second sentence is a fragment without it. All in all, this was an interesting chapter. I hope you include some action scenes soon!
Michael T.D. 2006-11-08 ch 1,	abuseYou have to come back sooner than soon. I was prowling for an update to Craft Moon, but when I noticed there wasn't one I had to fix myself up with this story. I'm glad I did. I'm not sure if this makes sense, but your style is so "to the point" it leaves even more to the imagination. I'm just trying to pinpoint why I like your style, so yeah, hopefully that comes across as a compliment.
Vampire Queen 13 2006-10-06 ch 6,	abuseThis is actually for chapter 7, but I can't post it because I already have a review posted for that chapter. You have a typo that my friend helped me notice. "The little sibling stared at the fresh tears coming out of Akiko’s ears." How are tears coming from her ears? That's all. The story is good otherwise. And I'm sure there's some reason for the talking dog.
Vampire Queen 13 2006-10-05 ch 7,	abuseWhat does a talking dog have to do with anything? Other than that, cool.
Vampire Queen 13 2006-10-05 ch 3,	abuseOne small mistake so far (otherwise good) "My father was a lazy pig whom doesn’t do anything but sales cars. " You should replace whom with who.
laura sedai 2006-09-22 ch 5,	abuseWow, there could be some character clashes when the sisters meet! This is a really good story, and although you might want to check your grammer and spelling a bit, it's got lot better in the last couple of chapters. Can't wait to read more!PS. Thanks for reviewing my now complete story Innocent, about the child vampires, werewolves and merpeople. The sequel will be up soon - as soon as I've answered all the reviews, which could take a while!

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