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| wolfiel 2006-08-24 ch 1,  | abuseThis was odd... really unexpected. I haven't been on fictionpress forever and it figures this is the first thing I see. =D... I really have no constructive criticism for you right now because my brain is dead.. Sorry.. But I'm wondering, (I read other reviews before reading the poem.)it seems that this is more about prostitution and all the people affected by it... o-0.. not quite so much Greek mythology with Paris' death and the fall of Troy... Then again.. maybe that's just me. |
| je suis une pomme du terre. 2006-07-29 ch 1, | abuseWow that was amazing! Knives and ending of arrows of Eros- I really loved that line. o I'm probably going to annoy you, but i'm really curious since you mentioned that you liked anime... did the inspiration for your name Ice and Snow come from DNangel?? You've probably never even heard of it... lol but I was curious... :D Never stop writing~Midnight Star~ |
| breezy nostrils 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abusethere was a lot interesting imagery. nice work and keep on going! |
| whitecap-walker 2006-06-27 ch 1, | abusevery very vivid. i like how you weave in the greek mythology. beautiful and dark. |
| Vicman 2006-06-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseIs this an allegory for the Trojan War? This sounds like Paris' thoughts as he was being killed over in Troy. |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-06-11 ch 1, | abusewow, some very vivid imagery in this. very well done keep writing! |
| MR.SEAN 2006-06-10 ch 1, | abuseI realy like this, it is a little creepy but the poem is very beautiful, I LIKE! |
| Purified Angel 2006-06-09 ch 1, | abusemm, nice poem, a lot of descripton, short, but has meaning behind it..i like =] |
| Arcane D. 2006-06-09 ch 1, | abuseHauntingly beautiful, and love the greek mythology-touch. Need I say more? - ADD-san |
| KonekOniko 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseHeh...you're so dark at times. It's alright, but I think you need to shorten things a bit, or maybe organize it into stanzas (did you ever notice that poems look shorter when they're in stanzas ^^;;) |