Overall, a very nice story. I can appreciate your viewpoint and can imagine those ignorant foreigners trampling all over other peoples' homelands (it's not just US, it includes many others), but I don't imagine the gangs to be much better either. Anyway, an interesting perspective. You have good, fluid, and emotional writing, so I'll probably be checking your other stories when I have time (I noticed that you do write longer stories, it is just that I currently don't have too much time to read, so I'm picking the shorter ones to sample your writing and decide if I should continue reading. So far, I'm very impressed)

Too bad the politics category is for poetry, otherwise I think this story would fit very well there. May I suggest that you lower your story's rating to T? Since there is no excessive profanity or explicit sexual situations, I think a T rating would suffice. It certainly would allow more people to find your story (as the default setting of the story filters are for K to T)

Either way, good job on your story. If you have some time in your hands, come check out my story and give me some needed feedback! Of course, I can totally understand if you don't feel like it or if you don't have the time to do so. It's all up to you!

Alright, that's all for now. Hopefully, I'll come back to reviewing your other stories soon. Good luck!

Well the good thing about this story is that it raised strong emotions in me, even though I have to disagree with most of the sentiments that are portrayed. Perhaps as a white English girl I am not qualified to judge- or to comment upon the American forces, and the type of democracy that they bring, but it appears to be an engrained characteristic within me, to instinctively support my own type of civilisation.

It was a very well written story, with a very interesting concept, and I admire very much your courage in taking a different stance on the matter. There are a few issues naturally, one being that in cultures such as Irathania things are truly worse under the goverment before, than under occupying forces. Sure, the soldiers might treat the natives with arrogance, and assume they are on offer, but lets face it, you can only buy what is on offer in the first place. If a woman is stupid enough to cheapen herself for a man in the first place, what does it matter if she is doing it for another native or a foreigner?

The US may take a long time to bring the better things in life- and expect rewards for it, but it is better to have some rule of law, than just all out chaos. It raises the profile of the country- of the aid given to it, and keeps it in the world's consciousness. Also, the narrator Siri has a bit of cheek being educated in the foreign universe, then whining about academics in ivory towers. In my opinion though she would be a fool to return to her own country anyway lol.

Maybe I am too conventional to fully appreciate your viewpoint, but I could never condone law of force, over law of reason. Besides you say that the gangs are loyal to the Goddesses. I think you'll find that in most scenarios that is not true. After all who can believe in loving and protective forces, and then go out and rape and murder the defenceless- as like it or not, gangs do.

Apart from that v. well written, and it provoked much thought.

One thing you might want to check is your spelling- I noted a few mistakes here and there, but that is easily remedied- Japenese, skeptism, etc.