I like the title of this piece...it's attention-grabbing. Anyways, I like this piece, it's very simple, yet perfect. Oh, and I absolutely love your use of allusions =).

The first two lines are my favorite and I like the similie.

Patronus... W00T!! I love that last line. Beautiful, beautiful.

*::~Cat~::*

woot fellow harry potter fan.

It kind of reminds me of a cloud. Good job! I like it. And thanks for giving me feedback on my poem!

Mm, I can imagine the liquid sliding down my throat. Lovely imagery, especially the way you associated white and silver with the drink.

beautiful descriptions

pretty :) pleasant imagery Easy to read thanks for the review btw

oh so u did put that vera thing on. cool. i didnt even see it at first.

lol. your last line is just perfect. the images you use to personify aloe vera are gorgeous. write on!