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| Kicking Poe 2007-09-22 ch 1,  | abuseadding the latin translations really brings another dimension to this piece. very ambiguous, as it should be. cheers. |
| proteen 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful. I especially like the way it's kind of abstract...that makes it easy to interpret and relate to. Great job! |
| breezy nostrils 2006-08-10 ch 1, | abusetwo feet (two miles) away - i love that part. nice work. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-08-09 ch 1, | abuseStriking - ending is surprising |
| bitterpaper 2006-08-08 ch 1, | abuseI like this alot, it really makes you think. I'm especially a fan of the line "you were two feet (two miles) away" --I definitely know how that feels. This made me shiver. Very nicely done! |
| The Melissa Occult 2006-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI don't know what to say. This was okay. What if someone asked you to marry him and he got killed before you could answer? that'd suck. Life sucks though, and we all either die or go fowards. Ellen in Pieces |
| poetic abortion 2006-07-04 ch 1, | abuselove it. love it. love it. + fav its just fantastic. gu. i gush over the brilliance that is this poem. ~* Noelle |
| by His blood 2006-06-17 ch 1, | abusei love this -- i love all your writing. i especially love the lines: 'i couldn't even make out/whether your mouth was laughing or sobbing/you were so far away/and everything was falling apart' and 'you were two feet (two miles) away.' all of this is beautiful, but that was especially perfect. ♥ |
| citrus scented 2006-06-15 ch 1, | abusewow. dont make this tempory. it has so much. it flows like shocks and gasps from a hospital bed, somewhere...the repition and the imagery swirls and spirals and the colours so bright. this is great. |
| the naked civil servant 2006-06-12 ch 1, | abuseunbelievable. incandescent tragedy painted in blood & fire. favourites? :| driving is such a legendary metaphor. |
| insomnia in dreamland 2006-06-12 ch 1, | abusegod, that was oh-so-tragic. it gave me chills. such a sad ending to such a sad story. very good though. |
| mindOFdeliriousUNREST 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abusethat is awesome writing! i love the descriptions |
| staysmall 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abusejust beautiful |
| a lonely september 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abusethis is really sad. and extremely well written. |
| faking closure 2006-05-31 ch 1, | abusepretty. it reminds me once of something me and sara were talking about once, 'what would you do if he had just told you "i cant live without you" and you were about to say something, then he crashed the car and he died but you lived?' and i didnt know what to say. i like this poem though, a lot. -naomi ps: rah. :( |