Wow. This is really powerful. Horrifically sad. Amazing. Excellent line breaks, wonderful allusion and language. Keep it up.

Wonderful voice. This really grabs a situation and analizes it well. "The relationship has sunk to a temperature-Below sub-zero", is very unique. Glad to see you posting again. Enjoy your works tremendously. MD.

*I* haven't posted in forever. Awesome. I love the sort of contradictions that pretty much work. The lines work wonderfully. Pretty much genius.

Made the elegance stiff and obsolete.-lovely

yeah, i feel like no one is on fictionpress anymore. big void.