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| eringobraugh 2006-10-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseoh my gosh that's so good :) I'm taking a philosophy class right now and it's a lot like that... |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2006-07-22 ch 1,  | abuseunique approach, i like, the contrast is amazing. |
| Left On The Shelf 2006-06-18 ch 1, | abuseAmazing, the way this fits together. |
| hidden sapphire 2006-06-14 ch 1, | abusewow this is really powerfully written. Good job. |
| xRayne 2006-06-13 ch 1, | abuseIt's brilliant the way you put that together. Simply brilliant. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-06-05 ch 1, | abuseMarvelous theme and the use of theme to get the point across. Using the "petal" analogy really works to show how the importance of some things only comes from the perspective that one is viewing them from. This has a wonderful continuation of sound that adds to the importance of the theme by showing the division of the two worlds. Very well written. |
| frayedlifeforce 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseshows your awareness of global problems - this poem is more in depth than others.i liked the contast between the two...things...you know what i mean.love this. especially that last long verse. again, you know what i mean. |
| HiddenFlame42 2006-06-02 ch 1, | abuseExcellent contrast! I love it! ^_^ |
| Sunset Teardrops 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abuseI love the approach on this topic, because it's so unique and interesting that you are able to connect all those thoughts about love and the real problems of the world. The use of "petals" add an echoic, almost scary, atmosphere to this poem. Great work! |
| Jezsh 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abuseI like the perspective of this, draws an interesting and startling parallel - it's so easy to just forget about things that aren't directly happening to us, and it's all too easy for everybody to be selfish in some ways. I liked the rhyme you put at the beginning but think that at times it's a little jilted, but still think that it adds to the tone. Interesting and well-written. |